cacti_rule84

Hi guys! Just wanted to remind you all I've decided to edit some of the chapters from my story. Also a re-post of the updated chapter for Metropolis' Megalomaniac!

NexusCrow-X

@cacti_rule84 XD read it again and it's hilarious! 
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cacti_rule84

@omegacrow-nexus thanks!
          	  Devin was in the school theatre, taking some paint with him to put a new layer of paint on his skates. While doing so, he overheard two people arguing, that being Zee and Oliver.
          	  
          	  Oliver: Oh, how cliche of you to use the same joke again! I do not have bad acne! It's simply small cleaning won't fix.
          	  
          	  Zee: Oh, really? Then I should know a thing or two about fixing, like your voice! You may think you sound sophisticated, but you sound overly dramatic...
          	  
          	  Oliver: *gasps* I am not!
          	  
          	  Zee: Like someone in Disney movie!
          	  
          	  Oliver: Oh really? Well, I'll have you know that I was close to being on one! And unlike you, I don't need preschool magic, I had an angelic voice. Ta-ta.
          	  
          	  Oliver smugly walks away while Zee was seething.
          	  
          	  Zee: "AnGeLiC vOiCe"! I'll show you...
          	  
          	  Zee then spots Devin sneaking away while holding a paint canister.
          	  
          	  Zee: Yooouuu heard all of that, didn't you?
          	  
          	  Devin: Well, only the part that started with the acne. I just only came her for paint, but I think I could help you...
          	  -
          	  During a school play, hosted by Oliver, Zee and Devin snuck behind the curtains and switched out the original music Oliver would sing with a song of their choice.
          	  
          	  Zee: This might actually work! He's coming!
          	  
          	  Zee and Devin sneak into the audience as Oliver was about to sing.
          	  
          	  Oliver: *whispers* Play the Titanic.
          	  
          	  Barry would play the music, only for the song Oliver requested turned out to be A Thousand Miles.
          	  
          	  Oliver: *whispers* That's not the song! Switch it out!
          	  
          	  Barry: *whispers* This is the only one here!
          	  
          	  Oliver: *to the audience* Uh-Uhm, oh Rose!
          	  
          	  Babs, who was playing Rose, was jamming to the song.
          	  
          	  Babs: *singing* And now I wonder! If I could fall into the sky! Do you think time would pass me-
          	  
          	  Oliver: Babs!
          	  
          	  The audience began laughing while Devin and Zee both nodded their heads.
          	  
          	  Oliver: THIS NOT PART OF THE ACT!!
          	  
          	  Babs: I'm adding this to me playlist.
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NexusCrow-X

Hello there, Here's more dialogue ideas
          
          1. Devin has Leslie test out a mind machine to manipulate lizards with her mind, something goes wrong as Leslie started feeling strange and painful shocks despite her powers, to the head, begging Devin to turn it off. He does so & tends to his spark girlfriend. At first, everything seems normal but days go by as Leslie isn't feeling herself, gaining traits of lizard DNA and every night, Leslie would transform into a muscle bound, electric lizard like monster on a rampage. Can Devin and the Supervillain Girls help her & find a cure? (This is 2 parter)
          
          2. A relaxing day at a five star hotel, Selina and Devin enjoy themselves while the cat thief noticed a rare platinum cat statue in a high level security that even a single thief would have trouble getting into, so what's a cat burglar and her boyfriend/henchmen for hire gonna do?
          
          3. Diana and Tatsu invited Devin to workout and train, to test his strength and fighting skills. He could barely keep up with them while also learning a few tricks to eventually level the playing field in his job. 
          
          4. Jessica and Pam have a little trouble with a rare field of sacred trees about to torn down for another lexcorp project so Devin decided to do something to help.
          
          5. Casey Krinsky is at it again to make Devin hers only this time after the fiasco with Leslie in body/power swapping, she becomes more careful and switched bodies with Selina instead. Can the cat thief get her body back & her boyfriend out of Casey Krinsky's clutches. 

cacti_rule84

@NexusCrow-X Part 1
            Leslie: So, why am I wearing this thing?
            
            Leslie was wearing a weird helmet.
            
            Devin: Well, this lets you control lizards with your mind. Now, you can also use this to distract, scare-
            
            Leslie: "Scare"? I'm already in! 
            
            Devin: Alright, but this might be extremely painful.
            
            Devin would go over to his computer and boot up the helmet.
            
            Leslie: Ha! I'm gonna be able to scare so many-
            
            A surge of energy hit the helmet, as it began lighting up. After a few seconds, the helmet started surging with energy all around it, hitting Leslie in the head.
            
            Leslie: Okay, starting to hurt....Okay, Stop! *grabs her head* GET IT OFF ME, PLEASE! NO MORE!!!
            
            Devin immediately turns it off and checks on Leslie.
            
            Devin: No, no, no, no, no! Are you okay?
            
            Leslie: *groans* Yeah, I'm all...good actually. Weird.
            -
            It was school time, as Leslie was standing outside, laying on the ground where the sun was beating.
            
            Devin: Uh, Leslie? What are you doing?
            
            Leslie: Sunbathing....it feels so warm.....
            
            Devin saw Leslie grab a couple of flies that were swarming around her.
            
            Devin: Okay, I'll....let you be...
            -
            A couple days later, Leslie had a hood on her inside the school, as she was peeling dry skin off.
            
            Carol: Ew! Do you not have skin care?
            
            Leslie:....New skin
            -
            Devin and the girls were staring at Leslie across the table, who was starting to get bullied up and turning pale.
            
            Selina: Leslie, you good?
            
            Leslie: Yeah, I'm good. Just been...adapting to new stuff lately.
            
            Doris: Are your eyes okay?
            
            Leslie: Yeah....I'm gonna go outside.
            
            Leslie leaves, leaving the others worried.
            
            Devin: (Something must've gone wrong...)
            
            Leslie was inside the bathroom, staring at herself. Her body starting to grow bigger as the lights in the bathroom all go out, with Leslie being the only one glowing. She then transforms into a giant lizard and crashes out of the school.
            -
            Selina: *looks at the hole* Devin, I think you need to find a cure, fast.
            
            Devin: Yeah, and I think I know where she is....
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NexusCrow-X

Hello, here's more dialogue ideas for your DC superhero girls henchmen story.
          
          1. The supervillain girls do a little spying on Devin's date with Barbi to make sure Cheetah has no intentions of trying to steal their boyfriend from him through hilarious and destructive means. 
          
          2. Devin is horribly ill and the supervillain girls aim to take care of their boyfriend to nurse him back to health. 
          
          3. During winter, Devin was minding his own business until he kept getting pelted with snowballs and spot his girls Doris and Leslie acting "innocent." He accepted their challenge in a snowball war.
          
          4. Kara and Zee were volunteered to test Devin's various vial of potions. What do they do and how would they affect the two girls?
          
          5. The supervillain girls experience their worst fears, Devin uses an invention to go inside his girlfriends' minds in order to help them take their nightmares down.

cacti_rule84

@NexusCrow-X (Quick change, it's actually a Gotham High letterman jacket)
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cacti_rule84

@NexusCrow-X Thanks! I also thought of three funny villains for him and the girls. They're based off/inspired by the characters in a comedy show called Trailer Park Boys.
            
            The first two are; a soon-to-be ex state trooper, Tom Ueller, who has a drinking problem and got demoted for having open liquor on his shift and the corridor supervisor; and then the hall monitor Leighton, who doesn't get taken seriously and is always eating pudding. Both of them have a shared hatred towards the villain girls (Devin is slightly better in their eyes) and Kara. They mainly try anything to get them out of the school. They also speculate they're the villain girls.
            
            Example:
            https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=GbGdQO9a5UE&t=12s&pp=ygUVcmFuZHkgaSBhbSB0aGUgbGlxdW9y
            
            And then there's the other one, Mark. Who acts tough while waving his western gun around and his leather jacket. He specializes in making synthetic kryptonite through using ice cream. He's also a bit of a hypocrite and always butts heads with the hero girls and villain girls in school.
            
            Example:
            https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=jgHNNdKOoBs&pp=ygUXY3lydXMgdHJhaWxlciBwYXJrIGJveXM%3D
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NexusCrow-X

Hello pal. Heres some dialogue ideas for your DC superhero girls henchmen story.
          
          1. The supervillain girls and their boyfriend Devin go to a luxurious hotel suite for their vacation away from Metropolis for the summer, having fun, chaotic & mischievous activities and a lovingly surprise for Devin by his girlfriends at night.
          
          2. Hal has seeing Devin hanging out with Carol and not obsessing over him. Seeing this as a trick to get back together with him again like with Thaal Sinclair/Sinestro, Hal tries to go to great lengths to get Carol to fall for him again but in reality, Carol isn't trying to make Hal jealous as she is happy with her boyfriend, Devin. Another plans resulted in Carol and Devin's date ruined as the two weren't happy with the jock. 
          
          3. Casey Krinsky develops an obsessed crush on Devin and steals Leslie's body and powers and spends the day with Devin to forever win his heart while Leslie, in Casey's body tries to convince her boyfriend and the villain girls that the Leslie seductively and creepily trying to swoop Devin away isn't her. Will they believe her? Or will Casey forever claim Leslie's life & Devin?
          
          4. Doris accidentally drinks a potion Devin for working on to reduce the strength of Wonder Woman, Supergirl, Hawkman and Superman as they're powerhouse like heroes. These causes Doris to lose her confidence, strength, size and bulk, feeling scared, humiliated and unable to show her face anywhere. Feeling bad, Devin decided to fix this with the villain girls help to get Doris back to her normal self and apologizes for what she went through. Can they cure Doris? Will she forgive her boyfriend? 
          
          

NexusCrow-X

@cacti_rule84 Wow, even more hilarious and amazing! 
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cacti_rule84

@NexusCrow-X Thanks!
            Devin was busy in his garage trying to weld more spikes to his bat.
            
            Doris: Hey, Devin?
            
            Devin: *not paying attention* Yeah?
            
            Doris: You got any extra drinks in your fridge?
            
            Devin: *not paying attention* Yeah, go help yourself.
            
            Doris checks his fridge to see if he has anything.
            
            Doris: Hmm, no water, not lemon soda, never liked cherry juice. Ooh, what's this thing?
            
            Doris pulls out a flask filled with green liquid.
            
            Doris: Cool, energy drink! *chugs it all down* Huh, tastes we-*body starts morphing*
            
            Devin: Doris, you good? Doris?
            
            Devin walks into the kitchen.
            
            Devin: Oh my....
            -
            Devin: And now she doesn't have any muscles on her!
            
            Doris: *hiding her head in her gym bag* I'm lanky now!
            
            Selina: So you're saying that you didn't pay attention and that Doris drank a potion made for those hero brats that made her...less her.
            
            Devin:...Yes.
            
            Doris: I can't go around looking like this!
            
            Devin: Look, I-I can make a new serum! I just need some time and, uh, that's about it!
            -
            The villain girls take Doris out for a stroll while wearing a hood over her head. And since her height was shortened, she couldn't see up above. At the carnival, she couldn't go on any of the higher rides. At Sweet Justice, she got a middle schooler meal. And any game of soccer, Doris couldn't even kick the ball.
            -
            Doris: *moping in her bed*
            
            Devin: Heyyy, Doris.
            
            Doris: Go away....
            
            Devin: Okay, so, I'm real sorry that I should've paid attention more...and should've labeled the serum. But, could you maybe just try this?
            
            Doris looks up from her pillow and chugs the serum, feeling nothing.
            Doris: It just tastes tangy-
            
            Suddenly, Doris had looked at herself and seen she grew back to size, bigger actually.
            
            Doris:....YES!!! THANK YOU, THANK YOU! IM BETTER THAN EVER!
            
            Doris picks up Devin and crashes out of the house, happy.
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NexusCrow-X

@cacti_rule84 You're welcome and nice one on the Casey/Leslie switch as well as the group body swap at the end! XD
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omegacrow-nexus

Hello hru? Also, I put more dialogue ideas for your story if you haven't seen it. 

omegacrow-nexus

@cacti_rule84 Neat and it's fine dude. I understand if you're busy. Take your time.
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cacti_rule84

@omegacrow-nexus hi, I'm good. And yes, I did  see the dialogue ideas. I've just been busy writing some of my stories. My bad.
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omegacrow-nexus

Hello, hru? I hope everything is going well for you and your stories.
          
          I also wanted to let you know that I made another DC superhero girls story but it's my first villain story with a marvel crossover twist. Since most of my stories DC or not take a hero and/or anti hero route, thought I'd give the villain route story a try. And since you like villains more, maybe check it out when you get the chance & let me know what you think of it. No rush though, take your time. Have a great day! 

omegacrow-nexus

@maple_syrup953 Wow. Not bad. That's really good.
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KyleDoerr4

Well Maple i was wonderin if you could do my kingdom hearts x villain oc x crossover story idea if you don't mind me asking because i'm curious to know 
          
          the council of evil (malice (xelyk quinzel) (my super-villain oc who is the caring 23 year old young adult super-villain brother of harley quinn and brother in law of poison ivy and the last remaining member and remnant of the true organzation 13 (with those details of what my oc looks like is that he has the same eye color as king sombra from my little pony friendship is magic and his hair looks like vanitas's black goku like hair from kingdom hearts and his coat looks like the master of masters's coat from kingdom hearts fused with yokai's coat from big hero 6 and the masked figure's coat from scooby-doo 2 monsters unleashed and his mask is basically a fusion of yokai from big hero 6's mask and the masked figure's mask from scooby-doo 2 monsters unleashed and has a red tattoo on the right side of his mask that looks like a scar is in kingdom hearts manga art style) and my oc's love interest is catwoman (selina kyle) (max's harley quinn the animated series) and his old friends basically are villains that he made friends with while traveling to the different worlds under the orders of the true organzation 13: adam (hazbin hotel) (my oc's right hand man) and belos (disney xd's the owl house cartoon series) (the powerful magic user) and lobo (puss in boots the last wish) (the big bad reaper wolf) and the ultimate green goblin (the ultimate green goblin is of kid arachnid's dimension from disney xd's ultimate spider-man cartoon series is in the spectacular spider-man cartoon art style) (the muscle) and dr. eggman) (dr. eggman from sonic the hedgehog live action movie series is in sonic prime art style) (the mad genius)

KyleDoerr4

thank you for being understanding you are the greatest 
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cacti_rule84

@KyleDoerr4 look, it's fine man. Alright.
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KyleDoerr4

i understand and i'm sorry for botherin you please forgive me 
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MariusB05

Just out of curiosity, when will the next chapter of Hazbin hotel come out?

cacti_rule84

@MariusB05 story got published. I don't if it's good or not, I wouldn't say it's my best work but I'm open to suggestions.
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MariusB05

It’s all good man, no problem 
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cacti_rule84

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@MariusB05 hey man, so the chapter got posted today, but it's not letting me publish it. It's acting all weird and shit. I gotta wait until tomorrow to get it fixed up. The story will is getting to be published at 5 pm. I'm really sorry man, Wattpad's acting weird for me 
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cacti_rule84

Hi guys! Just wanted to remind you all I've decided to edit some of the chapters from my story. Also a re-post of the updated chapter for Metropolis' Megalomaniac!

NexusCrow-X

@cacti_rule84 XD read it again and it's hilarious! 
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cacti_rule84

@omegacrow-nexus thanks!
            Devin was in the school theatre, taking some paint with him to put a new layer of paint on his skates. While doing so, he overheard two people arguing, that being Zee and Oliver.
            
            Oliver: Oh, how cliche of you to use the same joke again! I do not have bad acne! It's simply small cleaning won't fix.
            
            Zee: Oh, really? Then I should know a thing or two about fixing, like your voice! You may think you sound sophisticated, but you sound overly dramatic...
            
            Oliver: *gasps* I am not!
            
            Zee: Like someone in Disney movie!
            
            Oliver: Oh really? Well, I'll have you know that I was close to being on one! And unlike you, I don't need preschool magic, I had an angelic voice. Ta-ta.
            
            Oliver smugly walks away while Zee was seething.
            
            Zee: "AnGeLiC vOiCe"! I'll show you...
            
            Zee then spots Devin sneaking away while holding a paint canister.
            
            Zee: Yooouuu heard all of that, didn't you?
            
            Devin: Well, only the part that started with the acne. I just only came her for paint, but I think I could help you...
            -
            During a school play, hosted by Oliver, Zee and Devin snuck behind the curtains and switched out the original music Oliver would sing with a song of their choice.
            
            Zee: This might actually work! He's coming!
            
            Zee and Devin sneak into the audience as Oliver was about to sing.
            
            Oliver: *whispers* Play the Titanic.
            
            Barry would play the music, only for the song Oliver requested turned out to be A Thousand Miles.
            
            Oliver: *whispers* That's not the song! Switch it out!
            
            Barry: *whispers* This is the only one here!
            
            Oliver: *to the audience* Uh-Uhm, oh Rose!
            
            Babs, who was playing Rose, was jamming to the song.
            
            Babs: *singing* And now I wonder! If I could fall into the sky! Do you think time would pass me-
            
            Oliver: Babs!
            
            The audience began laughing while Devin and Zee both nodded their heads.
            
            Oliver: THIS NOT PART OF THE ACT!!
            
            Babs: I'm adding this to me playlist.
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