Caitlin

@CatieMurphy thank you very much i will take a look and see what i can do to fix up

@erikamarsolais Hello, I just read your story "Early Initiation Mate" I love fantasy stories! I loved the storyline but thought the sentences were a bit abrupt, they stopped alot. There wasn't a gradual flow that enticed me and maked me completely compelled by the story. Only because of the use of the punctuation. I think if there was to be more details, for example 'fur' (I'm just winging it here )... You could write (going to do grey fur) "a mass of silver fur engulfed her body. The long, coarse, strands, shimmered in the midday sun. Her sight swarmed and drowned in the flooding of images her brain processed from the sweet, floral woodlands around her. Everything was new. Everything was bright. Everything was loud. From the crisp, resting leaves being trampled on by the new born fawns to the soaring birds which flapped their midnight wings and basked in the glorious sunlight. It was warm. It was safe. For the first time ever, she felt alive." There's lots of fun ways to use repetition in short sentences. I used anaphora in the text by continuously repeating the start of a sentence in a new one.
            We all start somewhere and we'll never stop learning. We just have to ensure we keep it fun so our passion can flow through our writing.
            Anyways, writings really fun and I hope you enjoy writing your stories as much as people love reading them ❤️ All the best xoxo

@Lunawolf74772 
            Oh ok. Thats fine, I will just keep looking. Thanks anyway

@Lunawolf74772 It was a while ago but I think I had to Photoshop the wings, i couldn't find any good ones they all had some sort of problem so I end up just meshing 2 together :)