calismo5678

I LOVE ETHAN EVERETTE 

nawwarrrr

Hi, Calis! Do you mind checking out my book & give feedbacks? Thank you! 

calismo5678

Ok so I read the first chapter of your book and you have a great idea going, I think I only saw like 2 grammar errors but the only thing is so much is happening at once. Matt has anxiety then talks about his sister then has a Panic attack then his parents come in then he goes to school and then he sees the girl. 
            It's a lot to digest and understand and can make it very confusing.
            So what I would do is break it down
            All those things that happened in chapter one make them into a chapter of there own and go into detail 
            Once u accomplish that I think your book will go a long way!:)
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calismo5678

Of course! Once I'm finished reading my current book I would love too
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calismo5678

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