captivating_me

I know i shouldn't ask this of u but i was hoping u could help me with my book or review it and give feedback since I've never written a book before and tell u the truth I'm stuck

Hey hiiii yrr !!!!
          I'm hoping ur not offended with me  .. seriously yrr I'm really sorry ..I don't know what the hell is going on with my account. Why I couldn't send a single msg to anyone n y others board msg showing in my notification .Y ?? 
          
          Umm now I hope ur not thinking about me like " she is trying to ignore me !! ME !! WHO IS THE AUTHOR OF THIS  BOOK  !!! how rude, arrogant she is ?? Didn't reply me back how could she I'm gonna kill her whenever i get a chance ...
          
          So try to forgive me for my not-oh-so-called-blunder mistake !!!   
          
          so finally when I use a lil more of my brain part obviously my so intelligent brain told me " go say sorry n inform her through board msg !! So here I'm !!!! 
          
          
          
          

Can you check my story?
          I'll be glad to know your reviews. 

U  just captivated me ..I can't even explain u ..how much exiced I m..u just filled my hrt with joy ..u know what... today I was gonna off mh account...but accidentally I found ur book..n captivated by it....
          
          So in short u practically save my account... I just can't be offline now ..ur book got stuck me with u... Now m so happy...n in return I can only give u alots of hugs n kisses with wink .... thanku for giving us such a beautiful story... thanks