Hey Carmel, I really didn't mean to be so harsh on the first two chapters of your story. I remember getting my first honest feedback a few years back and even though the feedback was helpful and wanted, it made me feel like absolute crap as a writer for a while.
I hope you don't feel like this. I honestly do like your writing, otherwise I wouldn't have been invested enough to be so damn nit-picky. I think I laid too much on you too fast. No sane human could take that amount of feedback at once.
So if you feel bad, I'm really sorry but just know that it will pass if you let it, and don't don't DON'T give up on your writing! Everyone tells you you need a thick skin but that's easier said than done, I know.
Also, good luck with the talent show tomorrow (if you happen to see this tonight). I hope I can go and see you all. You're going to be epic :D