Teagan

Good things about your writing:
          Nice introduction of characters
          Good grammar and spelling 
          
          (Sorry it is kinda hard to tell much else at these early stages of writing)
          
          Things you should work on:
          Be more descriptive
          Show the characters' traits instead of listing them, if that makes any sense
          
          Of course, as you being an inexperienced writer I cannot blame you for these things, cor you are still establishing your voice, but hopefully these tips help :3

@Karramii997 Thank you, I appreciate that. But there is always something I can improve apon. I just need 100% honest tips and feedback. 

I really need tips and constructive criticism. I want to get better at writing.