fioregarden
The Irishman is a beautiful story. I do note that the structure of the story is under development. It runs smoothly through the Jamaica scenes becomes scattered in the middle - scattered time sequence and sometimes confusing beyond just suspense and flashbacks- and then returns to a traditional time sequence at the end which runs elaborately to the conclusion. The beginning intro is fine. The middle is where you may want to focus your editing on. Remains an all time favorite of mine!
charlie686
I thoroughly enjoy your feedback, and I agree!! Thank you so much for re-reading — I hope to polish it and release it this year!!
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