rubberbandgirl
Your story is very good. I think you could add in a little more excitement, but that's just me. Think about word choice and sentence structure, that's all I can say. Other than that, it is well written and has great potential. You must be really involved in the fandom, and I would think that for a first timer you could be one of the greats.
Dcnationfrost
@creator-P this story is so good please update I've been waiting i read it and im so excited for the next part
charliefdbiwierubvcr
@creator-P Thank you in a few hours i will revise them, but not to spoil to much but the first three I want to be slow because I'm getting ready to take you guys on a emotional roller coaster, but I will take your advice to heart thank you!