I like your plot since it reminds me of pretty little liars. However, I would like to see more description when it come to action since it flies past me. But people might like that. Another thing, which isn’t about your story but the layout, is that your paragraphing is very close making everything look bunched up and hard to flow with. Other than that great book:)
Thank you! And yes I totally agree, I’ve been switching back and forth from paragraph styles cuz that’s one thing I really struggle with figuring out which is correct. But based on what you said I think I will try and space everything out more! Thanks again!
I see nothing wrong with your story, but I feel you are a little TOO descriptive. But it helps the reader image everything well. But I'm not a expert or anything, but overall you are a great writer!