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If any of you get the chance, feel free to check out my new story, “Relations with the Mafia”. Let me know what you think!

Klaus has my heart forever too❤

Alright. For all those who were offended on my post about the story, I apologize. I can see that I could’ve worded my statement better and in a more polite way. That does not change the main idea of the statement. The story needs work. I understand editing is difficult. I do. I’ve written before (educational writing), and I have gone through the struggle of people saying my story is not good. It was written poorly and needed work. I honestly would be open to helping the author with her edits. Why did I read the story? Because I see where it was meant to go, I was excited for that. I love a good cliche, cringe story. I love reading and seeing how each author has their dream scenario go. It’s honestly entertaining for me. This story just needs structure. The main idea needs to be laid out and built from. The side story’s need to be connected and properly branched off. I tried rereading the story, and I noticed I couldn’t really read the first page. I’m not trying to be mean. I am a very honest open person. I have Asperger’s syndrome. I’m blunt. I cannot beat around the bush. In light of that, author, I would love to help you go through your story, edit, and clean it up. Like I said, it has good bones, it just needs the proper branching. Message me if you’d like the help. If not that’s fine, I hope you grow in writing, and I wish you luck. 

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NicoleMcKenzie0 please not to be rude but stop being bitchy it's not your book so keep your opinions to yourself it's not that easy to edit and by the way the book was fanfuckingtastic

I’m sorry, but your book is horrible. I mean... I couldn’t even tell what the main plot was. I saw the update about someone asking you to be a paid writer, and I thinks it’s good you said no. If you said yes, the editing they’d have to do to make anything in your story truly make sense would completely change the story. You need to edit. There are way to many errors in the story. Also, the last chapter before the epilogue, what was it for? It’s not like it was a good end, nor did it truly tie everything together. Seriously, the end of that chapter was Charlotte saying what she bought her friend, not to her friends, then calling it a night. Why is shopping a good end especially if we don’t know what happens in the shopping and the shopping is just shopping? The story probably had potential, I don’t actually know, but you really have a lot to do for it to be anything truly worthy of payment. Sorry. I just felt I needed to give the “tough love” and say that. 

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By the way the word is incomplete( you names your reading list uncompleted) 
          Don't mean to sound bitchy, but I'm sorta a Hermione, only much more sarcastic. 

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