Hello,
I'm Jemima. I'm just a reader and I critique stories on this site. I loved your first chapter of 'All is Fair in Love and War'. It's incredibly descriptive and your words and similes are beautiful. Your writing is wonderful and incredible. The story line is a very unique and interesting idea. Your writing IS good enough to publish!
xxx J
P.S. If you don't mind I'm going to recommend you on my occasional wattpad messages!