It wasn’t necessarily ur book I found it lovely, it just felt very fast paced and didn’t really provide depth. Although don’t get me wrong I absolutely loved the scenes and the general idea of it, I just feel the execution wasn’t right. I feel that there wasn’t enough connection throughout the character development and that when trying to develop the story it jumped around a lot and didn’t provide detail of the in between. I’m sorry if my wording doesn’t quite make sense it’s kinda hard for me to describe, but over all your skill for coming up with Storylines is great u just need to find the tricky blend of coherence and detail that make a book feel more natural. Please keep up ur writing from what I’ve seen, I think with practice you will make amazing books and that you could go really far with ur talent <3
