courtney_marie_

I've posted the first part of my new story, Gaining Yardage. Please check it out!

Califia

Hey Courtney~~Not a bad start to your writing. You just need (in my opinion) to sensualize/sexualze your work a bit.  For an illustration of this checkout an erotic little teenage dating story I wrote this summer--which continues to get a lot of attention:
          "A Walk in the Countryside"
          http://www.wattpad.com/story/16999941-a-walk-in-the-countryside
          
          [Part 4 of this story might push you personally a little out of your comfort zone--but you at lease see my point about writing more provocatively and sensually for an audience which is by and large hedonistic]
          Enjoy.
          ~~Califia

courtney_marie_

Hey guys, I haven't had a computer in about a year so that kind of screwed up my updates but I'm going to be posting a new story called "Gaining Yardage" within the next couple days. I will continue with "The World Outside" but I'm not going to update that as often.