crazykat357

hai Pepe .

I think that your writing skills are really good for a first book. Your chapter lengths are good. I don't know about other people I like average-long chapters. I think you should dial down on the swearing and try to avoid it as much as possible (maybe say something like 'and then he said of bunch of things that I wouldn't dare say in front of my mother' or something like that). Other then that, everything you've done is really good so far!