LenayaFallin

Hi Cutebunny,
          I'm working on a D/s themed thriller called 'The Fulcrum' and I'd love to know what you think. Suggestions, praise and critiques are more than welcome. I hope you don't mind posting a link, please feel free to delete if you do.
          https://my.w.tt/8EUHShlDfL

cutebunny17393

Its a little bit confusing on who's perspective your as. You had the sub, author then back to sub, try to stick to one pov that way your not confusing the reader, for example in both my books I tell the reader who's pov its as before I write then I do the same thing again every time the pov changes. Over all I'm highly interested in your book. Feel free to suggest a book type for me to write.
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