xZeena_
I don’t know if I’m meant to be harsh to writers, but didn’t you say criticism was welcome? I like your writing style but the thing is, your story lacks potential because of how rushed it was. I mean, after the incident, Nick lied and fooled Ziggy so shouldn’t she be mad at him? And how was the family so welcoming, they were snobby because they had many privileges. And you got a part wrong. Cindy didn’t just stand there, she sacrificed herself for ziggy, she tried and she ended up dead so how was she about to ask out Alice and was even alive in the first place? The relationship felt rushed too but your writing style is nice, could use some work, but it’s acceptable considering you spent 30 minutes on editing and writing. I just think there’s missing potential there and I’m sure you’re capable of restoring it. Regardless, it wasn’t the bad, it’s enjoyable.
xZeena_
@d4vilseye Hey, I'm glad you replied, usually writers find criticism unwelcome despite offering the chance to share it. I love how you worded this. I think for a first, it's decent and acceptable. I'd be interested in checking out your recent stuff and if you don't mind, I'd like sharing my opinion as well. Needless to say, I'm glad you evolved and you're progressively getting better. It's not like my first one wasn't rushed or terrible either, I despise it. Thanks for replying and being nice, it's not too expected nowadays. Have a great day
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d4vilseye
omg hi thanks for feedback!!! i don’t even know what i was thinking writing that story (it was my first time ever writing anything ), now it’s been a year since i wrote it and i realize how rushed it was but i’m glad others think the same. i’ve started a new story (not related to fs) and i feel i’ve evolved quite a bit since then, now i plan ahead what i’m gonna write unlike in this story. i think i had the idea in my head that cindy survived but played the bad guy in the death scene for a bit of something different but there was a lack of explaining there. i have no intentions whatsoever on working on it anymore i have moved on completely but i really appreciate the feedback. also idk how it has like 1k reads and then the stories that i am proud of have like 50
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