Jocelynn

@FanworldsGreatest oh haaaaaaaay emilaaaay

You said this was your first Fan fic so I thought I would help you out. So first off I am 17 and have already published a book. I read some of your Fan fic and you are a good  writer but just take your writing a little slower not everything has to happen one after another. The only other thing is more details while people are conversing and be a bit more descriptive with your words.

haaaaaaaaay jolly.