cherryred1771

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@dandelionduh i have one called sad poems its not great and i have only published two of it the rest are in physical book . I have posted my first two poems its not tht great. I will check ur poem after 11th . I am having my 12th terms exams and tomorrow is phy .pray for me darling  bcz prayers are my only hope . This shit is confusing.

cherryred1771

@dandelionduh i am not someone who should be giving advices because i stop every story i write in 2 chapters and i am more of a poet than an author but i can share my pov . First of all i would say change the parts where nixon and durazzo are inter changed and correct james and allesandro . Alessandros character is a chefs kiss bro u nailed it . Add few plot twists . Allesandro being jelous . Then a whole ass fight when bros find out abt aless . Mainly edgar . My fav parts are where diegi betrayed like i knew smthg was off with tht guy. Add few parts of flash backs in between abt aless and cam in past . 

cherryred1771

Hey 
          Its me the hopless lover 
          I finished reading your story and its so good
          Hope you update soon

dandelionduh

@cherryred1771 @cherryred1771 aww please don't say that as an artist! Art is art. There's no "better poem". Every poem is beautiful in its own way. Thankyou so so much for reading love, it means the world to me.
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cherryred1771

@cherryred1771 i read your poems ,its so damn good,better than mine. I can only write sad one .i also wanted to tell u that i am there for u . I have felt all those words you wrote . For me it wasn't tanned skin,  it was overweight.  I have felt my parents deserve a better kid maybe sm1 like you . They have given me everything i asked and have never told me i was not good enough.  Everytime i failed a subject she would say study its for your own good but every bloody time i procrastinate and fail .
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