lalakirsten

I was wondering if you could read my story and maybe give me some advice on it?
          
          Elise is a fifteen year old girl who writes in her diary about her teenage woes; crushes, her terrible communication with her parents, drugs, depression, love, suicide, social life.  She seems a fairly normal girl to others, but they don't see just how wrong they are.  Elise hides a lot of pain inside her, that only a few people know and her diary.  
          
          
          Dear Heart; Stop Lying, is powerful book aimed to opene peoples eyes to everyone around them.  It's purpose is to make everyone aware that the person they think might be the most happy, fun loving, outgoing person in the world, actually might be struggling and trying to get a grip on reality.
          
          http://www.wattpad.com/468351-introduction-pt1
          
          thank you.