dawnjohnson90260

OK for those check out my stuff after you read my poems on here go check out my stuff on my new account MCRLIVES16 I have more poems

can you please check out my story and tell me what you think, it would really mean a lot

This is something I put together after reading yours it's called 'while'
          
                   While
          'All she could do is cry an cry
          Because she could not bear to die
          She hasn't smiled in a while
          As she sits on the tile
          Hands shaking she puts the razor to her wrist
          To give the story a good twist 
          One cut two cut
          She finds herself stuck
          There voices playing in her head tormenting her because these are the monsters from under the bed
          Tears stream down her face
          As her heart does it's own race
          Words that she could only hear
          Fat ugly whore it's all clear
          As she stares in the mirror at her eyes
          That give away the whole disguise 
          She puts a fake smile 
          To show the world she can hold on for a while
          Next month before she knows it she's laying on the tiles 
          Surrounded in a puddle of blood
          The mean words you said 
          ended up with her dead
          Laying on the tiles all because of you she couldn't stay a while'

your writings are simply amazing, you are one highly talented person. I can relate to each and every one of your writings. I have exactly been there actually I'm going through all of it if it helps to know that you're not alone. Stay strong. :)

@Nightgoddess57 you're welcome

Thanks for the follow