Speartron217

Hi I like your books, and I was wondering if you could read my book, and tell me what you think about it, and if I should improve anything. I started writing the book 1, or 2 weeks ago, and it is called The Grand Plan: Part 1. you are going to need to type in my profile name Spearwriter 234, because my book doesn't show up when you type it in, and it is a fanfiction, Naruto Alternate Universe book.

daydreamer8520

@Speartron217 Glad to help!
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Speartron217

Thank you for your advice daydreamer85290, and I will have fun with my story since it is my first.
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daydreamer8520

@Speartron217 First off I am so glad you like my stories as someone who is constantly trying and trying to improve with every chapter I am shocked you want my opinion on improvements. So my advice would be don't do any unnecessary pov changes especially if it's for one line or for a quick paragraph, try and space out your writing a bit so its not to cluttered, and since it's lemon book I wouldn't, personally, keep putting a lemon warning at the beginning of every chapter, but that's just my personal choice. Other than that it seems pretty good so far, not my cup of tea as I dont read lemon stories often, but it is getting better with each chapter you do. Don't stop, keep editing, and have fun with your story!
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WolfFang012

I should be able to update tonight but please update she's a fighting dreamer soon

WolfFang012

Alright can't wait
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daydreamer8520

@WolfFang012 i plan too sorry! Its taking me a smidge longer than i expected but the update ia almost done
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