Hey!!! So I just checked out your first two chapters!!! You have a great storyline going on there, keep going. The only thing I would say is be careful your making it sound a bit like a play with the whole *rub his beard* ... Readers like description so instead maybe you could try something like... 'He brings his hand to his face, running his calloused fingertips over the stubble that lay across his jaw.' ... Also, (this is just the teacher in me but...) watch out for those capital letters ;) ... But other than those minor things you're doing good gurl!!! ... Don't let anyone tell you otherwise, it's your piece of work and don't do anything to it that you don't want to, write it the way you see it and your readers will read it the way they see it. Never give up! Xx
