@AnthonyJCrowleyisgay. Hi! I read your teen story and part of the johnlock story.
You write quite well for a new writer! Keep practicing, we all get better the more we do it.
Small suggestion… you may want to run your story through a word processor, like MS Word. You can get it to check the story for spelling and grammar, and offer corrections. It catches a lot of small errors, like if you put john instead of John (first letter capitalized for names).
It looks like you are having fun writing so keep doing it.