It is pretty cool, the one thing that I don’t really understand is that, you talk about y/n like a “she” but you put in two pictures of men. It’s a bit confusing for me. Idk. But I like the idea of the story, it’s really good.
Don’t worry about the reads. I, personally, always write it to myself, thinking what I would like to read. But if you really care about the reads, just tag a lot of thing in the description so it will pop up if they search for that.