Ethan Freddie Frazer

Hopefully :)

@KshipraSawant i hope you read and follow my book XD i would love to hear your advice on it

@diazo_figero Gotcha

@KshipraSawant but thats really the only thing i see wrong with it and its not really wrong it just makes it harder to understand the situation.

@diazo_figero Right, I completely understand. I have a bad habit of starting off the prologue one way and doing the rest of the story or next chapter differently >.<

@KshipraSawant Your welcome XD i have a few notes like you seem to jump the reader into the middle of a situation that they know nothing about. the begining of your first chapter you start out with a guy hiding behind the furniture XD you have started with them walking into the building and then that way the reader has a better explination of whats going on XD not saying you HAVE to just saying its what i would do to make it easier to understand for the reader

@diazo_figero Thank you very much! ^^

@KshipraSawant Your welcome its a good read

Thanks for adding my story to your library! :D