DeniseDodge

"Okay, Ommie!" Jaxon waved his hands enthusiastically, showing he understood while maintaining his grip around Jasmine's waist. "Addy hab a wong day at da' hoshito, I be good fow' Addy." he said looking up at Jasmine with innocent eyes.
          
          Jasmine's heart melted even more at Jaxon's sweet promise. She knew that he had a heart of gold and would do his best to behave for Zayne. She crouched down to his level and kissed his forehead, ruffling his curls tenderly.
          
          "Thank you, sweetheart. I know you'll be a good boy for daddy. Take good care of him, okay?"
          
          Jaxon ran back to Zayne and possessively wrapped his arms around his leg. "I take good cawe of Addy! I pwomeesh."

digital_theidiot

@DeniseDodge ah okay
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DeniseDodge

@DeniseDodge Once I get this into Wattpad I'll edit. RN it's just rough drafts and I use Chai//Character.AI for drafts and other edits
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digital_theidiot

@DeniseDodge aww thats adorable i love it! if you wanted my opinion on the quality of writing, i think it's great but i'm not good at writing myself so i can't be a good judge of that.
            also i think it would be better to say "showing he understands" and not "understood" since you're using present tense
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