Hello there. I read one of your work and wanted to give you some advice since we are both novice writers. Make sure that you don't put too much information in your story since not everybody want to read every single detail. Keep the important ones they need to know. Keep it simple yet very understanding. You have a very interesting plot, but I think you may put maybe a bit too much details that kinda makes it boring to read. Sorry if that was blunt. I just wanted to tell you that. You don't need to follow my advice if you want and can keep your way of writing. I just wanted to tell you that. Have a nice day! (⌒▽⌒）
P.S I too is also a bad writer so let us both try our best!
