MiraLake

Hey, it's MiraLake!
          
          I just read your book 'Rainbow Six Siege X Male British Soldier'. Sorry, it took so long for me to get to it!
          
          I think it's an interesting take on story writing. Your descriptions and knowledge of the military are very impressive. Your dialogue is good too.
          
          Some areas of improvement include grammar and formatting (but I'm pretty sure you already know that). If you're interested, I can help out in that department. Just send finished chapter drafts to me and I'll fix them up a little. I won't change the story around much (I'll leave the creative stuff to you).
          
          Anyways, it's an interesting read! Keep working on it! :)
          
          - MiraLake

doomhamer501

@MiraLake thank you and I'm sure  that they went two bad
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MiraLake

@doomhamer501 Alright. Then I wish you the best of luck in your writing! Your grammar's not that bad. I mean, compared to my early stories (which I never published online, thank God ), yours is readable.
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doomhamer501

@MiraLake 
            Hello and thank you for taking your time  to read my story. Don't worry about it taking so long to read it's fine and I know that my grammar is bad.
            
             For your offer I will haft to decline because I want to improve on my own and I'd dose not feel right to dump my chapters on you. You already do a great job of publishing your own storys and I don't want to take your time away from you just because I dont check hard enough. 
            
            So I thank you for taking your time to read and offer help to me and I hope if you read any more of my stories I publish in the future. Thank you
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