Kaitlyn

hey guys. sorry i haven't been updating as of late. i've been trying to work through the mother of all writers block. anyway, here's a tidbit of something i'm working on tell me what you think. :)
          
          why the queen of the astral world would ask such a thing of me was beyond my comprehension. those of us in the living world who can reach into the astral were hunted and killed. but asking me to save our kind? ME? the weakest of the astral specks? i don't see how i could help save our kind. i could only touch the astral world and only in my sleep where as most others could travel there whenever they were so inclined.
          
          you must find my children banished to you world. they would not let there descendants be killed if they knew. here is a list of them. i know not where they reside that is something you will have to discover on your own. find them and tell them what has happened.
          
          "I'll just give this to the astral rebellion. they're better equipped for such a thing." i thought to myself.

Hi! Just wanted to say that you have a lovely story :) I love Werewolf stories. So I liked the premise as well :) I added it to a book list for books I am reading :)
          
          Your story while pretty nice did have some errors that may turn readers off of it. I added some tips in the book and below: 
          
          - You could benefit from a Beta Reader, critiquer or editor. You can find them here: https://www.wattpad.com/forums/discussion/905464/☆+⭐Writer+Tools⭐+☆+Pinned+Thread+Index+%28Find+a+CriticEditorCo-WriterContestBeta%29
          
          - From the Multimedia Club you can get trailers, covers, banners, playlist and casting help to help benefit your story. 
          
          - From the improve your writing club you can get summary help, and more. 
          
          
          - Usually the first thread at the top of every club is a advert thread. You can post your story in the club thread for adverts that is your stories genre only.  
          
          I also noticed that your story may not be General fiction and more werewolf or teen fiction depending on age, etc. And your story could benefit from a title. Sorry if I sound bossy xD
          
          Hope I helped and I do some of these services so if you want you can just ask for anything :) Have a nice day :)