@eggybunny
I read your book and I have to say it's beautifully written, however a few changes I think would improve the book and attract more readers. Right now your book has very little connection to what an average person thinks, it is interesting but one cannot relate to it, which reduces the fascination. I would like to prove this theory of mine by means of a famous fantasy novel; Harry Potter. J.K Rowling sprinkled the book with relatable emotions and moments for readers of all ages. Other than that your book is really good.
