elenahale433

@that-guy-next-door we meet again.. Pandus Angax XD

ajmartin_98

Hi, sorry to bother you. But I would like to introduce my novel. I would be extremely grateful if you told me you thought. For now only available the prologue, but hope to update soon.
          A huge kiss :))))
          http://w.tt/1PLsB6K

elenahale433

There's a few problems with the way your story is written though. For one, whoever translates your book is not doing her job correctly, please ask someone else to do it for you. Another thing that happens to you is that you rush too much with what is going on. Take your time, show the characters thoughts, their deepest feelings. 
            You still have a really interesting idea for this book, so don't let that go.
            Kisses ;)
            T
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elenahale433

Ok I just read it and I have to say the idea you have for this book is amazing. T
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elenahale433

Hi @ AJMartinn! I'd really like to read your novel sometime soon, and I promise to comment on it when I have. ;)
              Kisses :):):)
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