elephant_lover_13

OK thanks

I read the first chapter of your story. It has great potential. Tips: try being more descriptive of what is going on, I found it a little confusing. Also, maybe try not rushing the story so much, take it slow. 
          
          Good luck writing ;) Please read,  vote, comment on my story, Badboys don't babysit! Tell your friends about it too! Thanks so much,    
           ~ Kenziearmitage0126

hey