CalikaLe

Good day! Your story popped in my recommendation and gave it a try. So here's my view; I think its a bit of rush? In the first chapter, they jump to each other. Give it a little pause since readers love to know the mc's life before they meet. At the blurb,I think you gave too much info. Instead, give a hook or something interesting point in ur story.
          
          Its okay since you said its ur first time to write. Good luck and have fun writing!

CalikaLe

@emarsh233
            Wow! I hope i have a major in writing too or something. Well, just continue writing & have fun!
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emarsh233

@AbsolutelyShesYours  thank you for this advice! My teacher told me to start writing books because I major in short stories.  I'll try it hopefully I'll be done with it by new years. Merry Christmas
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