ethine

@12Anne16 XD. said gets the point across, but I'll ignore it =D Your welcome :)

12Anne16

@ethine If you realise, I never ever use the word 'said' in my story ^_^ [*sigh* I had to say that] I get your point, and please ignore my previous sentence. Thank you, for both correcting my mistake and liking the story~ xD
          I'll pay more attention in the future, and perhaps correct that in the chapters I edit.

ethine

@12Anne16 No, I don't mind answering this question =D I like your use of descriptions, and the story itself is really good.
          
          I have one thing to add though, when somebody is done talking, you insert a comma instead of a period, for example
          "It's cold today," she said. 
          and you don't capalitize he said or she said unless it's a name.
          
          if the dialogue ends with a question mark, then no comma is needed, same goes for a sentence that doesn't have he said or etc at the end, for example.
          
          "I love your hat." She gazed at me, and nodded in approval as she looked me over before throwing her arms around me in a tight embrace. 
          
          I love your story XD