@amnesiawryts heyy, so i personally feel that a few sentences will flow better if you used simple words but in a better order, the writing is good overall, but when it comes to the dialogues a character is saying it's bit here and there.
@amnesiawryts heyy, please don't say that..i've read countless amount of book and i must tell you it's the underrated ones that have my heart more than anything especially new writers whom i've seen grow into accomplished ones..it takes time yess but you'll do well as long your story has good sense of art and reality.