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Thank you so much for the advice! I really want to do everything I can to improve my writing to the best it can be so I will keep this in mind when writing from now on. :)

@skelinTAN  Its okay :) I think that there are loads of good books out there and they should have more reads. Keep writing because you're a really good writer :) I would say use a bit more prose and less speech though- this is just constructive criticism not meant to be mean. 
            Zoë xx