@rivervixenog Heyy! It's completely fine I always love some good books. I started reading your book today. I'd like to tell you a little something if you don't mind. The plot, the theme, the idea is awesome and you flow and timeliness is also soo good. I honestly think that there is a lack of representation in it. The book can do so much better. Avoid writing long paragraphs, they're stealing the show of the chapter somehow. Also, try to seprate dialogues. What I mean is if two people are having a conversation, write each one of their dialogues in different paragraphs. It helps readers read in a easier way and provides fluidity. The grammar and sentence forming can be a tad bit better. Your situation placement is real good I loved it. Also remember a catchy beginning is a great way to get someone hooked onto a book. The plot you presented at the start is really good but again the presentation can use some editing. I highly recommend you editing the book but of course it's your decision to make. If you need any help with anything feel free to message me. I've a instagram with the same username, u can message me there too. If any of this offends you in some way I'm really sorry. Bye!<3
