fanboy_writer

Back to writing again. :>

DameInSlate

Hello po! If you have time you can read my story entitled 'Roadtrip' its a mystery-thriller with a bit of romance story which you can enjoy! 
          
          Here's the link: https://my.w.tt/sqdhESBoqS
          
          Synopsis:
          
          
          
          
          "Handa ka na ba para sa ROADTRIP?"
          
          
          
          Tawanan. Biruan. Halakhakan. Harutan.
          
          
          Iyan ang makikita mo sa loob ng kanilang van. Masayang pinagplanuhan ng bawat isa. Ngunit makatawa pa kaya pagkatapos nilang malaman ang lihim na nakakubli sa Mort Village?
          
          
          Nagkayayaan lang upang magbonding pero anyare? Nakatuklas sila ng sikretong malagim.
          
          
          Join Lyre and her friends as they discover the hidden mysteries about Mort Village.

Cormaclaggen

I know that you're in need of some help in your story. And if you want to improve just give it a try in my critique shop. 
          
          Here's the link: https://my.w.tt/sgYgeNu7UR
          
          The following are the parts that I will critique in your story.
          
          Outer Parts:
          
          ☑ Title
          
          ☑ Book Cover
          
          ☑ Blurb
          
          
          Inner Parts:
          
          ☑ Plot:
              ☑ Exposition
              ☑ Conflict
              ☑ Conclusion
              ☑ Phasing
          
          ☑ Narration:
              ☑ Spelling and Grammar
              ☑ Show vs. Tell
              ☑ Choice of words
              ☑ Style
              ☑ POV
          
          ☑ Characters:
              ☑ Character Development
              ☑ Dialogue
          
          ☑ Strengths and Weaknesses