I liked the first chapter so far, I can see the direction you're heading in and it's a great start. Some improvements I can share from what i've seen so far is
1. Establishing Mood & Setting
-What Works: Your first sentence, "We start our story in a dimly lit apartment building in Orlando." is a great example of that, it sets a relatable mood and allows you to expand towards your characters mood, all you need to is follow through.
-Improvements: Expand on the setting to deepen the atmosphere. For example, describe the sound of rain outside, the hum of the laptop, or how the dim light plays off her surroundings to evoke a stronger mood.
-Example: "The faint glow of her laptop illuminated the clutter-free apartment. Outside, the muffled sound of traffic mixed with the occasional whistle of wind brushing against her window. The air smelled faintly of lavender from a candle she had let burn earlier."
This is something you have to practice so don't be discouraged if it seems like too much. No one's rushing you, take your time to create your masterpiece and go back and edit whenever you feel like it.
