@HowsitGoingbros3 it had an interesting beginning, however I would change the theme to fringles being older than kindergarten, It felt a little too toxic having a kindgergardener be like that, I would recommend at least sixth grade for those type of actions, it could be more realistic or in the realm or disbelief to have him be sixth grade at least or high school. It is an interesting concept, and the writing is well done BUT I would recommend making fringles sixth grade or older. I hope this helps, and if there’s anything I could do to help please let me know
