@fapnir
i severely apologize for ghosting, i know it sucks when a story's updates are all over the place-- but ill do my best to be more consistent. im thinking about doing some art for this series as well, so thats a thing. chapters are more planned so i can actually be consistent lmao. but yeah there will prolly be a chapter out every day or two and if it takes longer ill bounce back as soon as i can!
sorry bout the huge delay, now that school is online it got a whole lot harder-- but chapter 2 is out!
What do you think of my Land of the Lustrous fanfic so far?
@fapnir Thanks for the feedback and yeah the use of "they" is intentionally to talk about a gem without using any gender in particular. Yeah I have noticed I've been using less dialogue and I'll work on that, thanks!
@gemlover2 i really like it! the pictures/gifs is a great visual touch, and the detail is so cooll! i suggest doing a spell check before u publish though since i caught some grammar errors and also add more dialogue, but other than that i love it! keep up the great work ^^
the prologue is outtt!
okay im really back now, and i want to restart my story possibly with new characters and some removed but mostly a story change. ill work on the draft tonight after my homework is done!
@fapnir Well we do know that they are mortal, and like us have to teach and have kids. I find the more there are similar things that are needed for mortals to survive the more you can get started. Admirabilis also have a slug form that's small and cute, bug because what the Lunarians did with their people you have a lot to work with. Like making a character Admirabilis that could be a girl or boy. Then have you understand what they eat which is mostly like parts of sea plants. And then you can have Lunarians attack or take someone or them to cause climax
@gemlover2 hmm well i was leaning toward this idea where the story would be more focused on admirabilis since the lunarians are already really developed. id have to make up some things since there isnt much info tho
how long should chapters be? in words or minutes (ex. 2000 words or more/ 10mins long)
@fapnir Thanks for the advice, and thanks for continuing this. I think I'll make Rutile as the possible friend/enemy for my main character.
oh my gosh i just checked this since like forever! i lost motivation for this since it was only my two friends reading this so i just dropped it. thank you lots for the response, and im not great with advice but here goes:
introduce the characters youll visit again the most in the exposition chapters,andesine, apophyllite, emerald, covellite i think were introduced in the beginning since theyre the key characters.
as to how, situations in where the mc needs help, they can think 'ah! i bet [yeet] would be great help!' or when the mc is just roaming around or maybe in extreme situations where the mc is in danger, cOugh lunarians, a new character can be introduced there and rush in to help out of the blue. any situation can work really, it just depends on how it is worded. carefully intertwine the character into the story. instead of saying 'Out of nowhere, [yeet2] came to the rescue!' it can be improved to 'In the corner of mc's eye, [yeet2] came to the rescue!' little changes can make big differences, is what im tryna say.
last thing for now, the mc cant get along with everyone! when meeting new chars dont be afraid to spark conflict for their first meeting. this can later be resolved through forgiveness or they can stay enemies. it makes things more lively. perfect is boring, yknow!
ill gladly answer more questions and ill continue this story. thank you again for this, gem!
I'm definetly NOT a great writer, but we all have to start somewhere! Here is my AU of Haruko Ichikawa's Houseki No Kuni! https://www.wattpad.com/story/195159585