I'm looking to start a new story soon i need some help to see if its any good. please help me
Play With Me
It was thirteen to the day that he went missing, and four weeks tell the anniversary of Matthews disappearance, she was eleven what her brother and best friend went missing. Those few weeks were branded in her mind, the sounds of her mother screaming and her father trying to soothe her. Missy was told by many that she was lucky it wasn’t her, but she didn’t feel lucky, she lost her twin and best friend within a month. Officers asked her what she saw when Henry went missing and when Mattie went missing, she would always say the same thing, she was reading when it happened. But that didn’t mean she didn’t notice when her brother left or when Henry walked away and didn’t come back, she just didn’t say that to them. But she saw the blood, she knew what had happened, she understood everything. Missy was very aware that they told her parents that she would need someone to talk to, she knew why the lady in pink was talking to her, she knew the thoughts the woman was having about her, how she stared at her purple eyes and blue hair and silently called her a freak. She was used to it, and in some cases laughed at how people thought their minds were safe when she could look at them and know their darkest secrets.
“good day officers”
Missy then jumped off the coach and walked over to her little brothers play pin and took him out. He giggled at the police officers as they walked up stairs to his bedroom.
heres the first paragraph im working on. please tell me what you think! Thank you so much!!