fourstringsgood

No worries, I'm not taking OTR down for a long time yet. I seriously thought about it, but then wrote the thought down because when I've had what I know is a stupid idea it helps to express the thought in order to understand the consequences.3

storieswillunfold

@fourstringsgood ah yes, good idea to go through that process. I for one am particularly happy you're leaving it up here  (even if you perhaps go back and change things)
          	  
          	  It seems quite hard to find readers, unfortunately, on Wattpad. But for me it felt (feels) like an incentive to be getting the book out somewhere, anywhere... and obviously, I'm very happy that you're now reading my work :)
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storieswillunfold

Hi there, hope your weekend is going well. Mine is slipping away from me once more. I still have work prep to do and am meeting my sister later. It's so hard to get a run of time to write... but I do have Easter coming up, so that's good.

storieswillunfold

Have a great time with your friends. That is more important than anything I think. Although that's probably the wrong thing to say or think when trying to write a novel!! but we're not machines ... 
            Hope the work on the website goes more smoothly than you're anticipating, fingers crossed
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fourstringsgood

@storieswillunfold Feeling slightly adrift this weekend. I have friends calling by this PM ( which is welcome)and then have repair work to do on my agent's web site (not so welcome, always takes longer than I expect) - I am FRA's web manager as well as its longest serving client. There is never enough time - so I'm very grateful that you're taking so much of it to read and comment on my work when you should be getting on with your own. I was thinking about keeping a notebook and pen handy to jot down any forward thinking so that, in theory, I just have to copy the notes into Word and then fill in the gaps between thoughts. Easter will definitely be useful.
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fourstringsgood

No worries, I'm not taking OTR down for a long time yet. I seriously thought about it, but then wrote the thought down because when I've had what I know is a stupid idea it helps to express the thought in order to understand the consequences.3

storieswillunfold

@fourstringsgood ah yes, good idea to go through that process. I for one am particularly happy you're leaving it up here  (even if you perhaps go back and change things)
            
            It seems quite hard to find readers, unfortunately, on Wattpad. But for me it felt (feels) like an incentive to be getting the book out somewhere, anywhere... and obviously, I'm very happy that you're now reading my work :)
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storieswillunfold

I just saw your about Once Turn'd Round... 
          Please can you leave it there a day or two more? I've been v busy at work and haven't had a chance to read the last few parts... Would love to if possible...
          
          The other thing is, I've been back to my prologue and Chapter 1 of GT, but I still feel that I have rushed them a bit ... I need to add a few scenes to Chap 2... But overall, I hope that I've changed the focus enough, and that now the betrayals Erica has experienced are setting her up on a parallel (if substantially milder) path to Sedna - themes of the breaking of the father/daughter bond, moving onto the theme of replacing sorrow and fear with embracing action. I hope the book will feel more as if it's gone almost a full circle by the end ...
          (I still need to double check my last few chapters). I feel I'm getting there - I just wish that I'd had more time over the weekend before work started up again this week. Very frustrating.

storieswillunfold

@fourstringsgood I'm really happy to hear that you were treated so well at the hospital and that you had good news. I'm sure it must be impossible not to worry. How lovely to be home and back aboard the Barnabas... 
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fourstringsgood

@storieswillunfold Completely agree. Today I had to go for tests at Epsom hospital that I had been dreading for weeks. Just before I left home, your first batch of messages arrived, and reminded me that 1) I'm not defined by illness and 2) I'm on an imaginary voyage that is much bigger than any medical condition, and I'm not sailing alone. The day went well; the tests were conducted with great care and my worries were without foundation. I got home mid-afternoon and was immediately back aboard the Barnabas. Thank you for that!
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storieswillunfold

And a final note... 
            It does feel great to see you working on your book as I'm working on mine (and that will especially apply to the Rings of Sedna, as I've so much plotting yet to do on that). It feels motivating. And I love that you've posted a complete story here as well!
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storieswillunfold

Hi there, thanks for your reply. Hmm, I think there's something a bit glitchy about communicating here. But thanks for persevering it was really good to read your messages. It will be good to chat in person about all of the different work you've done. I'm so glad to hear that there were so many people around to help you when you were very ill. Even so, it must have taken a v philosophical approach to get through it. 
          You are so clearly such a creative person. I loved reading your thoughts on the difference between scriptwriting and prose. 
          Yes, you saw that I'd put some ideas for who to act out the story - that was on a Wattpad prompt. I mentioned my daughter was really into me posting my story here - so we just picked out some actors together as a kind of fun/silly thing to do. So I now see, when I look at the photos again, how young they look. So it goes: first the story sits for ages on an ancient computer which is now probably some awful piece of ewaste somewhere, and now it sits on an interactive - or something - website with no-one reading it ... well, I can make one exception to that - YOU are reading it  - so thank you for that. Actually, getting down to writing a sequel for it made me go back and take another look, as did getting a notification that you'd left a comment. 
          Back to the actors chosen... well, I did my best to match how I'd already visualised my characters - and actually I can truly see Bjork as Sedna and Catherine Zeta-Jones hamming it up as Mrs Withy, also Capaldi as Incarna...
          I think I too may run out of space soon... now you've mentioned a character count, I can see some numbers flashing along as I type...
          I think my main frustration is not working with an artist. I tried to commission one of my students to do the cover, but she really didn't seem to grasp how I saw the book and her illustration didn't work at all unfortunately. In my mind, I see all the landscapes, and the tin opening and light pouring out of it (or darkness) ...

storieswillunfold

But picking up on your comment about your fatigue with your novel ... this honestly goes to show how important it is that someone else - apart from you, the labouring author - reads the writing. I can't see any reason at all why this novel wouldn't be snapped up straight away ... Honestly, the story is super intriguing on the idea level, and then the way you then narrate it is wonderful, so skilful. I can't find anything negative at all to say about it - nothing! It just reads beautifully - your language is so precise - at times you dwell on a scene, at others move on swiftly - so the forward momentum is judged perfectly. I'm totally blown away! 
            I can only dream of being able to keep the quality of writing so consistent on each page as you do...   I'm in awe!
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storieswillunfold

Absolutely amazing! I loved both of these book trailers!
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fourstringsgood

@storieswillunfold Thank you for all those kind words. At the weekend I was feeling pretty fatigued and annoyed by my novel, thought that I was losing it & decided to try something different just for the change. If nothing else, at least I could label Icarus as "finished" on Wattpad. I did investigate the Unpublish and Delete options for the novel, but then thought nah, what's the difference? It's a Word file already, I can finish it in my own space and time anyway, why not just leave the online version alone for a while & have a day off?
            
            That cover art was done with 3D graphics: it was just a matter of setting up the scene, adding landscape details, positioning the tin model, sorting out the scene lighting and there it is - done in literally a couple of minutes. A while ago I used the same software to do animated book trailers (Like film trailers but for books) for a couple of novels by an American friend, Adam Sydney, a very fine writer, self-published, who deserves to be better known, famous even, a cause which my advertisements haven't helped to advance one iota. Here they are, anyway, just to prove how simple it all is:
            
            My Heart is a drummer is a modern tragi-comedy of manners https://adamsydney.wordpress.com/2012/10/08/my-heart-is-a-drummer-trailer/-
            
            https://adamsydney.wordpress.com/2015/03/16/and-you-thought-book-trailers-were-all-terrible
            (The link to the trailer is in the first paragraph)
            
            Right, I have vowed henceforth  to limit the length of my messages and curtail their frequency, lest I myself become a source of fatigue and annoyance to others, so for today, thank you again for your continuing encouragement, and I will now open Word and put that encouragement to good use.
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storieswillunfold

Hi there, it's really great you've added me to your reading list - thanks! I've added you too. I loved your opening chapters. The writing is so good - very atmospheric and I can see it building into an intricate story. I like the idea of each chapter being a tape.  Are you writing as you're posting, or do you have a bank of chapters to upload?
          It's interesting you writing for films. Fantastic!

storieswillunfold

@fourstringsgood That's really impressive - how clever! I liked your other image - but it is great to  now have an image that reflects your name - and your interests :)
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fourstringsgood

@storieswillunfold Yes, thanks for asking, I'm making progress, allowing myself the weekend to get the additional material in place - with any luck I'll be posting it about the same time as you're uploading your revised chapters. 
            The only thing I've achieved today, though, is changing my Wattpad profile pic to something more appropriate. It's my first bass guitar - the one that I played at those 1985 gigs including the St Pat's ones. Over the years it suffered modification, neglect and damage until fairly recently when I completely rebuilt it and restored it to its original condition.
            
            Hope you have a satisfying and successful weekend of editing.
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storieswillunfold

oops - poor writing - I mean has started off as older in tone...
            
            How about you... have you had a chance to write the scenes which you mentioned before? You are doing your writing the better way - thinking a bit more carefully before posting it here...
            I am going to take a leaf from your book and revert to that :)
            
            Fingers crossed I can keep to my plan of finalising the beginning and end of GT at the weekend. When I repost the edited chaps I'll let you know (or I have a horrible feeling that - as you have my books on your reading list - that you get notified each time I make a change!! So sorry about that! 
            
            Looking forward greatly to reading your next tapes... but I know these things need to form in their own time ...  we are but vessels, eh?
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