Califia

Hey Kat~~I like what you're doing with "Toxic Love." You have a great narrative voice--very tuned. What I think your writing could use to make it more of the page-turner variety, is just a bit more heat. . .yup the steamy kind. And for this reason I'm sendng you a short stopry of mine which might just epitomize this for you in the least amout of space. Now you should know part 4 to this litttle tale was given a "R-Private" rating (for followers only). But come on, pay no mind to that. I'm sending you the hot conclusion anyway as a random act of kindness and tutorial :)
          
          Enjoy. (Part 4 is best read whle home alone . . .  you'll know why . . .)
          Feel free to message me anytime
          ~~~Califia
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/16999941-a-walk-in-the-countryside
          https://www.wattpad.com/52450827-a-walk-in-the-countryside-part-4

gonerfromslowtown

@Califia aha thanks for reading my book. it was based on true events about my ex. they were writing one about me so i thought it was only fair to tell my side of the story. nothing steamy really happened between us, which is why nothing like that was written. plus, i'm only 14, nearly 15, so that would be kinda weird if i did write anything that should not be read around your family. but thanks anyways lmao.
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