grapeTM

if yall like studio investigrave games (aka the people who made deadplate and elevator hitch), yall should definitely check out my new oneshot book

grapeTM

yall ever heard of deadplate?

beanstacular

@grapeTM i love dead plate!
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Kid-lost-inCostco

OMG YESSS ITS SO UNDERATTED
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Emilysiff

@grapeTM ooh ill look at it in pinterest
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MWAHISBARSFORHER

Heyy grape sorry I keep bothering you but I posted a new chapter can you please give me a approval on it I need a expert to look at my stuff

MWAHISBARSFORHER

@MWAHISBARSFORHER  thank you and I just fixed that
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grapeTM

@MWAHISBARSFORHER nah, you're all good and i'm shocked you consider me an expert, haha. as for the chapter, the only issues i see would be using more proper punctuation (its difficult to see where a sentence ends and begins) and use a bit more proper grammar. this last thing is kinda something i personally do, but i would recommend that you space out the words a bit more. like, every once in a while, press enter to start a new paragraph. for me personally, it's hard to read just a huge blob of text. but besides those things, you're doing pretty good!
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MWAHISBARSFORHER

Hii I was wondering if you can view over what story I just posted a few weeks ago and see what I need to add and delete this is my first story I ever created ✋ pls don't hate

grapeTM

@MWAHISBARSFORHER after reading it, i would probably say that the main issue im seeing is that there's a lack of punctuation in some causes. this could make it hard to read for some readers, as it'd be difficult to tell where a new sentence starts or ends. i would say to just check for those before posting. another thing i noticed that it's a lot more dialogue and not enough action. i would suggest maybe showing more of what the characters are doing than just having them just speak to each other. lastly, i would say that the story is progressing just a bit too fast. i've noticed that the exposition is kinda just jammed into a few sentences and doesn't really explain the world that it's set in. besides those things, i think that it has the potential to be a great story
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MWAHISBARSFORHER

@MWAHISBARSFORHER like I'm saying do you have any advice
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