hajarafandi

Theres lack of punctuation. And then you should beware of the capital letters. Sentences that should be put into one paragraph, you split them just to make the pages longer. And i think you’re too quick to put the story into interesting scene. Just... let the readers know and love your characters first. No need to rush. I know you love to write. Relax... please work harder to become a great author. I’m sorry. Someones got to be honest with you so that you can push yourself to be better.

@AjaAfandi why did you keep my story in narration problem again??????
            Is there something wrong with my story?

@wynawakaur i will TRY my best. i donno... lets hope this upcoming bulan puasa will give me something to write off. but yeah, your comments just made my day. thank you so much!

@wynawakaur children*

@wynawakaur I've bought and read the novel. I'm madly inlove with yoyo lol. Hmm idk maybe something like scrv raya or maybe they are expecting for child? Hihi