heal_millo_33

Wait, wait, wait! So you're telling me you've been moving around Wattpad and haven't read 'SMOKE' by Jane Reo? *Pretends like I'm not the Author* 
          	
          	Sister, brother, whatever you think you are, sit down and contemplate life. How did you miss a book made with good writing skills-- not just in grammar, but plot-wise, character-wise and everything-wise?
          	
          	Fantasy, check.
          	Aristocracy, check.
          	Medieval days, check.
          	Romance, che- ...eck? 
          	And the last but not the least; Mystery, check! 
          	
          	Spare me a bit of your time by checking out the Synopsis or Prologue of the book "Smoke". It'll be worth it, trust... my advertisement?
          	
          	Thank you and be blessed!

heal_millo_33

Wait, wait, wait! So you're telling me you've been moving around Wattpad and haven't read 'SMOKE' by Jane Reo? *Pretends like I'm not the Author* 
          
          Sister, brother, whatever you think you are, sit down and contemplate life. How did you miss a book made with good writing skills-- not just in grammar, but plot-wise, character-wise and everything-wise?
          
          Fantasy, check.
          Aristocracy, check.
          Medieval days, check.
          Romance, che- ...eck? 
          And the last but not the least; Mystery, check! 
          
          Spare me a bit of your time by checking out the Synopsis or Prologue of the book "Smoke". It'll be worth it, trust... my advertisement?
          
          Thank you and be blessed!

wambuimuiruriii

Since you wanted to post publicly on my story, let me match that energy. Your religion is yours, and my writing is mine. Spew some Christianity bs on my work again and things will get devious. Not to mention your incredibly racist takes on a book that has black women as the focal. Like what was the reason?

heal_millo_33

@wambuimuiruriii and if you didn't see it, check out 'To Love A Friend'. A short story with a white protagonist. Tbh it's partially preference that I use different skin colors. We have so little black protagonists on Wattpad compared to white protagonist. But I'm sorry if it's making you uncomfortable that I'm using black skin.
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heal_millo_33

Let's converse on my page. I'll check out what I posted publicly on your story, and we'll discuss it here. Tell me why do it's wrong. And if I'm wrong, I'll apologize. But if you are... I'll just be satisfied if you can see my point.
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heal_millo_33

@wambuimuiruriii 'Christianity bs'. I'll leave that. It's better I don't read books that will give me problems, than read it and confront the Author. However people react to your book, if it's not good, we have to shove it down our throat hm? Firstly, I'm black. What the heck is racist about my book? My male leads, some of them are white. The other characters, are mixtures of black people and white people. It's in a fictional world where people are mixed. I'm not comfortable writing about white protagonists because I barely know much about you and your culture, one mistake- and y'all gon take my head off. So it's racist to have black protagonists written by a black person? Beautiful. I think it's also racist for you to have protagonists that are white. So many authors do this on Wattpad. No one, no single one- tells them you're racist. Your logic is extremely flawed. Are you deliberately picking a fight? And if you don't have the ability to debate your opinions and respect others, frankly don't engage in such.
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Mxrrori

Thank you for the feedback. Since right now what’s going is on is pretty shaky and if I suddenly just start explaining things it will be uncomfortable for me, I will progressively include more plot every chapter until at the end of the story, everything shall make sense. Well, hopefully. 
          And since there is basically no plot, would you mind if I included you by an alias in the story? Perhaps a minor role, as I am not very well aware of your personality, but certainly one that impacts Portman’s decisions.
          And also in case you don’t already know this (by your comment of feedback in which you suggested that Portman is the main character, albeit not directly): Portman is one of the main characters. But as you may have noticed—although the plot is shallow—the title of my story is called Eyes. So, the Eyes are actually the main characters. Hopefully that makes sense. 
          Portman is very important, and without him, the Eyes will not be where they are at the end of the story, but he is not the main character.