Hi, I am very pleased with your short story/book. It's really inspirational and I really liked it because of how relatable it is to many people's lives. The fact that I've experienced my own insecurities about the pressure of being perfect made it even more motivational and hopeful. It warms my heart whenever I find these kind of books to read.
The book didn't have many grammatical errors, as far as I could tell anyway. I'm not that particular on grammar, but it does bother me on occasions when people don't capitalize names or end sentences with periods. Haha, I just had to point that out because I can't stand reading pages that seem like rough drafts. I like to see some efforts in editing work. I blame my English teacher for that.
There's really not much I can criticize, on my belief. I'm not really a good critic, so that's part of it. But I would like to know if you actually experienced some of the things that were in the book. There were some cases where I wasn't really feeling what you were getting at, but maybe that's just me. Other than that, that's all I got haha. I'll surely let you know if I have anymore comments. :) It's an overall fantastic book, and I'm really happy that I found it.