hellyeahghost

Just tell me when you want me to read it again. When it's fixed I'll write the review.

Starting off you need to go through every chapter and fix somethings. I don't want to be a grammar nazi but bad grammar and missing punctuation is a turn off for reading a book. Also there was a lot of cases were you misspelled words or you miss typed and there are random letters just laying around. The idea for the book was great but your lacking in a little detail. If you want example just read a chapter of the Legend of Zelda Fanfic. Every detail to the feeling of the world of life in the body. To the drip of blood from a wound. 

Okay sorry I had to go work. I hate working on Saturdays but life in the military is like that.