@puzzledlife Got that, and you don't have to feel sad about asking for anything! This story is as much yours as mine, so suggestions, favorite scenes, story turns anything good or bad is acceptable to me. What I only want is somebody telling me what they want or where am I wrong and then, I'll try my best to see if I can get that done. I just don't want unexplained vanishing. (I feed off my readers enthusiasm- I am selfish that way) Not that I don't understand if someone's busy and reasoning, I just want to know if I am on the wrong track and how things can be better and how things can improve. Silence is just confusing and a whole- I don't see if I am headed in the right direction or not.
Anyways, thanks for your feedback. I'll try to make it less description oriented. I have a few chapters pre-written so the shift might not be super evident immediately, but I'll keep it in mind as I write more. Also, if you have read the first book- Cordially, Yours!- you may also have realized that I wander a lot in the emotions more than in direct-dialogue. I feel dialogues alone can be easily misinterpreted and the situations and conundrums just intensify when perspectives are explained. But, I understand your pov too, the story should progress! These were the initial chapters and so, the pov and situations had to put through to catch up on each character. I hope you'll now find more direct dialogue from now. Thanks for your feedback, I'll try my best to work on it.
Love,
HF